Hey Dev, Just trying your vn, it looks super cool. So I thought why not and while I was playing I found something you might wanna add because the avn needs it and that is....
Text-box transparency. It'll bring a little bit more charm to ur avn. And we can enjoy the beautiful background that you worked so hard on, it's a shame that the 1/3 of the background is covered by that text-box. Pls dev fix it..... Ur players earnest request. And pls add name change too.
Hi! Thank you for the feedback—yes, these changes will be included in the remaster. If you have more ideas, feel free to share them! As it turns out, I don’t always notice everything ( ´ ▽ ` )/
There's some interesting writing in some of the text between scenes, when there is just a black background. Have you ever played Lessons in Love perchance?
You’re right—the technique of using black-screen text for internal monologues was indeed inspired by works like Lessons in Love . I love how it immerses players in the protagonist’s thoughts. You might spot other familiar techniques too… You know how it goes: you’re writing, and suddenly realize you’ve ‘reinvented the wheel’ (￢‿￢ ). But isn’t that the essence of creativity—drawing inspiration, reinterpreting, and making something your own? I hope I’ve succeeded
Игра прекрасная, одна из лучших, если не лучшая в своем жанре. Я только хочу пожелать успеха автору и спросить о том, когда будет русская версия 2.1 на Андроиде?
The versions 0.2 and 0.2.1 differ in that the latter includes bug fixes, while the story duration remains the same. The RU version was released later and already had the fixes applied, which is why it is labeled 0.2. Thank you for your feedback
can you make it so your uncomfortably long pauses don't break skip please? it makes looking at other choices kinda annoying having to scroll back one and then scroll forward to skip get through them quicker, especially the porno scene it has so many and is inbetween the gift choices and the end of current content
I have played so many AVNs that at this point, you would think that I’d stop being surprised at the sight of good writing. Yet after playing EOFA, the demonic urge to write a review possessed my hands and levitated me over to my keyboard. The writing here is utterly genius. It may simply be because of the lack of good writing I’ve seen recently, but I genuinely think that this is one of the best written AVNs out there, especially out of those from the modern era.
In a world where AVNs with pretty renders and writing that reads like ChatGPT on xanax vie to become the next Eternum, this game says something. Still, that description feels off. It is rather not that EOFA says something but that it has something to say.
Sure the visuals… Leave room for improvement, and are frankly, dogshit. That doesn’t matter to me. Great writing is great writing no matter what medium it takes. One could even argue that great writing thrives precisely in the presence of Augean visuals, for authentic expression requires no packaging. You can not imagine the elation I felt when I jumped up from my seat and screamed “Finally, a game written by a human!”
With just the introduction, the absolute ART that is the writing in EOFA is nakedly apparent. The tone of the story is immediately apparent by the first black screen. With the almost poetic opening lines juxtaposed against the silly, comedic line before the flashback. The flashback is punchy, effective and gets to the point. I roast other AVNs for blathering incessantly in dialogue, especially the intro (AHEM MayFly, pretty good game in other aspects, but the damn intro, man).
D-San shows us how it’s done properly. The number of lines in the introduction are much much less compared to most other AVNs, where the intro is this huge, boring monologue delivered by the MC. Here, it’s a realistic internal dialogue which--also realistically to the character--gets interrupted upon the sight of Dora. But wait, there’s more! It is not only the reduction in the yapping that makes the intro stand out from the purgatory of mediocrity, but the lines themselves. Every single line, every single dialogue DRIPS with craft. A intimacy with the personality of the characters and the art of dialogue unparalleled in the AVN genre. The characters are HUMAN, and I, as the player, can empathise with them.
Even when Sam is just sitting inside of a car with Vic, getting the inner workings of a manual transmission car explained to him, the dialogue is never boring. Then again, it might just be my autistic obsession with the most random of things, but the tone in which it is set, the comedic internal thoughts of Sam, and the questions he asks somehow made me genuinely engaged in the story at that moment.
Now the plot. So far, we only have a little part of the plot given to us. Not enough to pass judgement on the wider structure, but even so, I love the postmodern narrative structure. No end goal, no real “tension” in the narrative sense. Instead it’s just chill, following the life of Sam, kind of game. And that is something that I don’t even think the classic legends of AVN writing could (or did) do well, or to this level.
Now, finally, the choices… Ohhh the choices. EOFA doesn’t hold your hand through choices, no. It EXPECTS you to make the right ones. To be emotionally mature, and be a good person. It is SOOOOOO rare to find an AVN game that does this, not only giving you choices that matter, but letting the story TELL you that it matters. The micro-inflections of Dora that change depending on your actions, the realistic portrayal of trust, and the lack of fear to humanise Sam or Dora (One could even say that perhaps, the game is even feminist in that sense). Your actions are not really punished in a narrative sense, for there is no plot here. Instead, you are punished for your crimes on an emotional level. EOFA doesn’t tell you that you are being a dick. No, it SHOWS you, and honestly, that is something more AVNs need to do.
Honestly, from the writing of choices alone, if some aliens came down from the stars and asked me to volunteer one person to become the omnipotent, omnipresent God of everything. I would nominate D-San. Somehow, they can give you free will, and still have that fit nicely into a fixed plot.
I could go on and on about sooo much more of what the game does right. How it actually gives the main character personality, the social commentary, the meta-awareness of character writing, etc. But honestly, I couldn’t say more, because I wouldn’t have anything to say. How does one go to critique writing that is THIS perfect?
I eagerly await future releases of EOFA, trusting that, as long as it is in the hands of someone with as competent of a writing ability as D-San, it will not disappoint.
Thank you D-San, for making something so authentic and expressive. The writing comes from somewhere real, and it shows. Thank you very much for what you’ve done so far, as well as all the great writing you will do in the future.
Also, comedy is PEAK. “Feed my hungry kitty~💘” Had me laughing so violently I almost died from choking on my own saliva. 10/10 would almost die again.
i keep seeing MC and thinking i'm looking at a girl./ pls give "Sam" a male haircut, and PLEASE let me rename him. it is extremely hard to relate to the story if i cannot even relate to the MC.with those changes, it could become a true gem
Checked it, try clicking 'ignore'; the game should continue. But thank you for the information! If there are any more errors, I'd be happy to hear about them! I will definitely fix them and release an updated version of the game.
I like this novel. it has the right tone, cute moments and had me laughing a lot. I'm still debating which is better officially starting a relationship with Doriana or keeping it vague. Only thing that I question my decision on is Sam doesn't know her enough to take the bullet for her in the Christmas party, but I do like how they get closer without putting a label on it. The porn was kind of disorientating, and it bothers me there are choices that aren't really choices. I liked the Tarzan/Rapunzel/Jesus look.
i'd say he does know her well enough, they have discussed her "problem" before, and the look on her face showed that she was immediately concerned.. as a guy, my concern is that her iq is so low that she even suggested such a game when she knew the possible outcomes.. that's a game for singles, not for ppl in a relationship. by her choosing a game like that, she just justified me pursuing Eva and Victoria on the side. it shows that she doesnt mind doing things with others. but yeah, not a bad story so far. a bit of a slow burn, but the plot is believable enough to be taken seriously
he doesn't know. She only lets you know about her condition after you make her officially a girlfriend. If you don't, she is too flabbergasted by your rejection to explain why she locks up. You are kind of right about the king's game through
he does know. she tells you about her "problem" AND you potentially make her your rescue-girlfriend, long before the xmas party.. "Sam doesn't know her enough to take the bullet for her in the Christmas party" xmas party is literally the last thing before the end of current content.
The dialogue in this VN is bussin fr fr, finally some characters that talk like actual teens instead of giving major “how do you do, fellow kids” energy 💀
The writing is lowkey carrying the whole game, gonna keep tabs on the updates
Many people complained about the jargon in the English version and stopped playing for this reason. Unfortunately, I don't do adaptations and translations, it is done by enthusiasts. Today the Russian translation is finished, it should be more original, as this time it was strictly controlled. If there are those who want to do the translation, you can use these two versions (Russian and English) to get a better text. In the meantime, I will be asking for help from my acquaintances.
I'm honestly in love with this vn. It has some great story telling so far with so pretty unique characters. I also found it pretty funny that the way they speak is pretty much my generations lingo lol.
It took me 1hr 45mins to play thru. Honestly i really enjoyed the way they talk, it started a bit weird for me but I got used to it pretty quickly and the way dialogues are written made me smile more than I imagined it would. The relationship between characters is solid for me. I love the jokes and the openness when any of them talk.
I play vns for the stories and this was an amazing start. I would like a walkthrough because like I said I just enjoy the story which is meant to be seen as the dev wanted to show. The action with consequences can be played without it but having a walkthrough given by the dev is always appreciated.
It's a amazing start and I hope you don't give up on this vn. I am very interested to see where this story goes and I hope others find it just as interesting and amazing.
If you need any advice or help I know a discord server where there are few devs and people who help others. You can join them if you want. The server belongs to another dev who created "CosyCafe" and they are all very friendly there. Also you can share your vn and it's progress there.
Thank you very much for this detailed feedback. I'm glad you liked it. ( ˶ˆᗜˆ˵ )
I will definitely think about the "true ending" and other aspects. Knowing that people like this, I will try to find the strength not to complete the project ahead of schedule.
Thank you for the opportunity to provide technical assistance. Right now I have connections with other developers who help me in difficult times and answer my silly questions. For now, this is enough, but if they ever get tired of me, I will definitely write to you. (´• ω •`)
The Description looks Enticing and Good enough I Might be able to Enjoy this at a later Date( If more Updates are incoming) Considering that this is fresh Release, I will go back to this in the FUTURE I promise that.
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Hey Dev, Just trying your vn, it looks super cool. So I thought why not and while I was playing I found something you might wanna add because the avn needs it and that is....
Text-box transparency. It'll bring a little bit more charm to ur avn. And we can enjoy the beautiful background that you worked so hard on, it's a shame that the 1/3 of the background is covered by that text-box. Pls dev fix it..... Ur players earnest request. And pls add name change too.
Thank you.
Hi! Thank you for the feedback—yes, these changes will be included in the remaster. If you have more ideas, feel free to share them! As it turns out, I don’t always notice everything ( ´ ▽ ` )/
There's some interesting writing in some of the text between scenes, when there is just a black background. Have you ever played Lessons in Love perchance?
You’re right—the technique of using black-screen text for internal monologues was indeed inspired by works like Lessons in Love . I love how it immerses players in the protagonist’s thoughts. You might spot other familiar techniques too… You know how it goes: you’re writing, and suddenly realize you’ve ‘reinvented the wheel’ (￢‿￢ ). But isn’t that the essence of creativity—drawing inspiration, reinterpreting, and making something your own? I hope I’ve succeeded
A list of contained kinks could be useful on deciding whether i want to play it.
Игра прекрасная, одна из лучших, если не лучшая в своем жанре. Я только хочу пожелать успеха автору и спросить о том, когда будет русская версия 2.1 на Андроиде?
The versions 0.2 and 0.2.1 differ in that the latter includes bug fixes, while the story duration remains the same. The RU version was released later and already had the fixes applied, which is why it is labeled 0.2. Thank you for your feedback
this good
Just discovered this right now it seems interesting.
can you make it so your uncomfortably long pauses don't break skip please? it makes looking at other choices kinda annoying having to scroll back one and then scroll forward to skip get through them quicker, especially the porno scene it has so many and is inbetween the gift choices and the end of current content
Thank you for the feedback—I’ll look into what can be done about this (。・ε・。)
have Chinese？
Hi dear, maybe in future...
Oh, it's a shame
this is a good game
Glad you liked it (･ω<)☆
I have played so many AVNs that at this point, you would think that I’d stop being surprised at the sight of good writing. Yet after playing EOFA, the demonic urge to write a review possessed my hands and levitated me over to my keyboard. The writing here is utterly genius. It may simply be because of the lack of good writing I’ve seen recently, but I genuinely think that this is one of the best written AVNs out there, especially out of those from the modern era.
In a world where AVNs with pretty renders and writing that reads like ChatGPT on xanax vie to become the next Eternum, this game says something. Still, that description feels off. It is rather not that EOFA says something but that it has something to say.
Sure the visuals… Leave room for improvement, and are frankly, dogshit. That doesn’t matter to me. Great writing is great writing no matter what medium it takes. One could even argue that great writing thrives precisely in the presence of Augean visuals, for authentic expression requires no packaging. You can not imagine the elation I felt when I jumped up from my seat and screamed “Finally, a game written by a human!”
With just the introduction, the absolute ART that is the writing in EOFA is nakedly apparent. The tone of the story is immediately apparent by the first black screen. With the almost poetic opening lines juxtaposed against the silly, comedic line before the flashback. The flashback is punchy, effective and gets to the point. I roast other AVNs for blathering incessantly in dialogue, especially the intro (AHEM MayFly, pretty good game in other aspects, but the damn intro, man).
D-San shows us how it’s done properly. The number of lines in the introduction are much much less compared to most other AVNs, where the intro is this huge, boring monologue delivered by the MC. Here, it’s a realistic internal dialogue which--also realistically to the character--gets interrupted upon the sight of Dora. But wait, there’s more! It is not only the reduction in the yapping that makes the intro stand out from the purgatory of mediocrity, but the lines themselves. Every single line, every single dialogue DRIPS with craft. A intimacy with the personality of the characters and the art of dialogue unparalleled in the AVN genre. The characters are HUMAN, and I, as the player, can empathise with them.
Even when Sam is just sitting inside of a car with Vic, getting the inner workings of a manual transmission car explained to him, the dialogue is never boring. Then again, it might just be my autistic obsession with the most random of things, but the tone in which it is set, the comedic internal thoughts of Sam, and the questions he asks somehow made me genuinely engaged in the story at that moment.
Now the plot. So far, we only have a little part of the plot given to us. Not enough to pass judgement on the wider structure, but even so, I love the postmodern narrative structure. No end goal, no real “tension” in the narrative sense. Instead it’s just chill, following the life of Sam, kind of game. And that is something that I don’t even think the classic legends of AVN writing could (or did) do well, or to this level.
Now, finally, the choices… Ohhh the choices. EOFA doesn’t hold your hand through choices, no. It EXPECTS you to make the right ones. To be emotionally mature, and be a good person. It is SOOOOOO rare to find an AVN game that does this, not only giving you choices that matter, but letting the story TELL you that it matters. The micro-inflections of Dora that change depending on your actions, the realistic portrayal of trust, and the lack of fear to humanise Sam or Dora (One could even say that perhaps, the game is even feminist in that sense). Your actions are not really punished in a narrative sense, for there is no plot here. Instead, you are punished for your crimes on an emotional level. EOFA doesn’t tell you that you are being a dick. No, it SHOWS you, and honestly, that is something more AVNs need to do.
Honestly, from the writing of choices alone, if some aliens came down from the stars and asked me to volunteer one person to become the omnipotent, omnipresent God of everything. I would nominate D-San. Somehow, they can give you free will, and still have that fit nicely into a fixed plot.
I could go on and on about sooo much more of what the game does right. How it actually gives the main character personality, the social commentary, the meta-awareness of character writing, etc. But honestly, I couldn’t say more, because I wouldn’t have anything to say. How does one go to critique writing that is THIS perfect?
I eagerly await future releases of EOFA, trusting that, as long as it is in the hands of someone with as competent of a writing ability as D-San, it will not disappoint.
Thank you D-San, for making something so authentic and expressive. The writing comes from somewhere real, and it shows. Thank you very much for what you’ve done so far, as well as all the great writing you will do in the future.
Also, comedy is PEAK. “Feed my hungry kitty~💘” Had me laughing so violently I almost died from choking on my own saliva. 10/10 would almost die again.
i keep seeing MC and thinking i'm looking at a girl./
pls give "Sam" a male haircut, and PLEASE let me rename him.
it is extremely hard to relate to the story if i cannot even relate to the MC.with those changes, it could become a true gem
Got it, I'll think about it (。・ε・。)
lol i just played a bit more.. thanks for the haircut, it helps a lot :D and i do love how it was forced on
meMCJust a heads up, pressing the bottom option will cause an "an exception has occurred screen.
Thanks, buddy! I'll take care of the corrections right now!
Checked it, try clicking 'ignore'; the game should continue. But thank you for the information! If there are any more errors, I'd be happy to hear about them! I will definitely fix them and release an updated version of the game.
I like this novel. it has the right tone, cute moments and had me laughing a lot. I'm still debating which is better officially starting a relationship with Doriana or keeping it vague. Only thing that I question my decision on is Sam doesn't know her enough to take the bullet for her in the Christmas party, but I do like how they get closer without putting a label on it. The porn was kind of disorientating, and it bothers me there are choices that aren't really choices. I liked the Tarzan/Rapunzel/Jesus look.
i'd say he does know her well enough, they have discussed her "problem" before, and the look on her face showed that she was immediately concerned..
as a guy, my concern is that her iq is so low that she even suggested such a game when she knew the possible outcomes.. that's a game for singles, not for ppl in a relationship. by her choosing a game like that, she just justified me pursuing Eva and Victoria on the side. it shows that she doesnt mind doing things with others.
but yeah, not a bad story so far. a bit of a slow burn, but the plot is believable enough to be taken seriously
he doesn't know. She only lets you know about her condition after you make her officially a girlfriend. If you don't, she is too flabbergasted by your rejection to explain why she locks up. You are kind of right about the king's game through
he does know. she tells you about her "problem" AND you potentially make her your rescue-girlfriend, long before the xmas party..
"Sam doesn't know her enough to take the bullet for her in the Christmas party"
xmas party is literally the last thing before the end of current content.
truly a hidden game, love your dialogue and writing, keep it up
Any news regarding the next update?
Hi, I hope the release will be announced in the next two weeks, but there are no exact dates yet (-ω-、)
The dialogue in this VN is bussin fr fr, finally some characters that talk like actual teens instead of giving major “how do you do, fellow kids” energy 💀 The writing is lowkey carrying the whole game, gonna keep tabs on the updates
Hi dears!
Many people complained about the jargon in the English version and stopped playing for this reason. Unfortunately, I don't do adaptations and translations, it is done by enthusiasts. Today the Russian translation is finished, it should be more original, as this time it was strictly controlled. If there are those who want to do the translation, you can use these two versions (Russian and English) to get a better text. In the meantime, I will be asking for help from my acquaintances.
Thank you for your attention!
I'm honestly in love with this vn. It has some great story telling so far with so pretty unique characters. I also found it pretty funny that the way they speak is pretty much my generations lingo lol.
What future tags are you planning? Harem? ntr/sharing? pregnancy? futa/trans? femdom?
Hi dear!
Possible future tags : harem and pregnancy ᓚ₍ ^. .^₎
Harem?
ntr/sharing?pregnancy?futa/trans? femdom?
that is the correct answer <3Yes
I will try this once I get free but I hope this has or get a harem ending. The vn looks good and I will rate it when I play it.
All the best for future updates and take care.
The story is still in development, but would welcome your feedback •ᴗ•
It took me 1hr 45mins to play thru. Honestly i really enjoyed the way they talk, it started a bit weird for me but I got used to it pretty quickly and the way dialogues are written made me smile more than I imagined it would. The relationship between characters is solid for me. I love the jokes and the openness when any of them talk.
I play vns for the stories and this was an amazing start. I would like a walkthrough because like I said I just enjoy the story which is meant to be seen as the dev wanted to show. The action with consequences can be played without it but having a walkthrough given by the dev is always appreciated.
It's a amazing start and I hope you don't give up on this vn. I am very interested to see where this story goes and I hope others find it just as interesting and amazing.
If you need any advice or help I know a discord server where there are few devs and people who help others. You can join them if you want. The server belongs to another dev who created "CosyCafe" and they are all very friendly there. Also you can share your vn and it's progress there.
I wish you all the very best and take care.
Thank you very much for this detailed feedback. I'm glad you liked it. ( ˶ˆᗜˆ˵ )
I will definitely think about the "true ending" and other aspects. Knowing that people like this, I will try to find the strength not to complete the project ahead of schedule.
Thank you for the opportunity to provide technical assistance. Right now I have connections with other developers who help me in difficult times and answer my silly questions. For now, this is enough, but if they ever get tired of me, I will definitely write to you. (´• ω •`)
Have a nice day!
The Description looks Enticing and Good enough I Might be able to Enjoy this at a later Date( If more Updates are incoming) Considering that this is fresh Release, I will go back to this in the FUTURE I promise that.
It's all right, I understand. Just don't force yourself ദ്ദി(˵ •̀ ᴗ - ˵ ) ✧